Saturday 17 October 2009

FUCKED! - by David Barber

David's back, but a word of warning...there's a lot of swearing in this one...just noticed the title...oh, fuck!

FUCKED!

“It shouldn’t have fucking happened that way: it was supposed to run smoothly and no-one was supposed to get hurt.”

“Oh, we’re fucked. Oh, we’re fucked. We’re fucked…fucked…fucked.”

“Will you shut the fuck up Graham and calm down.”

“But, we are fucked though.”

“NO! we’re not fucked, Joe. You can calm down as well and shut the fuck up.”

Tony sat at his kitchen table alone, hands covered in blood, swearing too much at the voices...


BIO:
Manchester born and bred, but now living in Crieff, Scotland with wife, Lisa, and our two daughters, Imogen & Melissa. Recently inspired to write again by an old and good friend (Col Bury) and the beauty that surrounds me up here. Always reading - when not entertaining my girls and working - crime and horror…and now writing. David blogs here.

16 comments:

  1. Fuckin love this, Dave.
    And it's more profound than it seems.
    Good work.

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  2. Short sharp and fucking good. God, you've got me at it now.

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  3. Cheers guys. Was making tea when I wrote this.....and swearing too much!! Thanks again.
    Regards, David.

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  4. Great stuff David - keep up the good work.

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  5. Thanks Alan, just added you as a link on my blog if that's ok. Thanks for reading it and your comment.
    Regards, David.

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  6. Hah ha ha. Laughed out loud when I read the title, and then really enjoyed the flash fiction - so much said in so few words.

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  7. Loved the last line at the end -- great piece!

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  8. Loved this and especially the ending! Great stuff.

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  9. Lily, Nicole, Paul and Joyce. The fact that my words are being commented from around the globe means a lot to me. Sincere thanks to you all.
    Regards, David.

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  10. when does the film come out what an opening scene,i'm there!!!

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  11. Incredible piece, really. The ending was fucktastic!

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  12. Erin...Thanks a lot. Your comments are very much appreciated.
    Looking forward to the next 12 days on your site.
    Regards, David.

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  13. Someone asked me if I found four letter words in literature to be offensive. I told them to fuck off!

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  14. I seem to have created a swear fest!! Thanks for looking.

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