The inimitable Richard makes a welcome return with...
EMPTY
DINERS AND PASSING TRUCKS
Beyond the stained window the highway looked deserted. Patty felt she
was in the wrong town with no visa. The
diner was empty apart from the guy in the corner. He’d been eyeing her all
night.
‘I don’t suppose you have a light?’ he said, walking over.
‘Sure’, Patty said, flicking her Zippo, hiding the stain, snuffing it
out. ‘Spare a cigarette?’
‘Oh yeah.’
The waitress
bristled past, all swish of starched uniform and the click of over chewed gum.
She looked at them out of the corner of her eye, a slight curl of her lip.
Patty stepped
outside into the mix of ice cold and diesel fumes. After the initial
silence, they started the smokers’ chat. Weather, journeys, directions,
bitching about this and that, and then he said it. Just like that. No
interlude, no build up. As if he was ordering a pizza. ‘Last night I killed a man.’
He took a deep
drag and blew it skywards then turned and looking her right in the eyes, said,
‘A guy got smart. He was nobody, really. I shot him. Twice.’
‘That right?’
Silence. And just
two burning cigarette ends in the cold and the smog. A truck whizzed by.
‘Why you telling
me this?’ she said.
‘Cause there’s one
thing I always feel like doing after I kill someone.’
‘No shit?’
‘You look good to me.’
‘I ain’t gonna sleep with you.’
‘I ain’t asking you to sleep with me, honey. How old are you anyway?’
‘Twenty-six.’
‘That right? There’s a bad dude out there, in case you ain’t heard, he’s
been chopping women up. Much badder’n old Jim. I don’t kill ladies, just fuck
them.’
‘I can look after myself.’
‘Heard one woman got her throat opened up real bad. Out here, alone,
just her thumb in the air and only her poontang to pay. They call him the
maniac trucker, although I hear this guy drives a pick up.’
‘Thank you for the smoke,’ she said, walking back in.
Inside, the waitress stared at her from behind the counter, hands on her
hips. Then she went out back. Patty felt weak and as she tried to remember the
last time she’d eaten, Jim walked in, laughing, almost dancing across the diner
to where she sat.
‘Come on, darling, we can do it in the john,’ he said.
The smell of pizza drifted across the air.
‘How much you got?’
‘I knew you were a pick up. I reckon you’re worth a hundred.’
‘Hundred and fifty.’
‘Done.’
He peeled a stack of tens out of his wallet and laid them in her palm.
‘I’ll see you in the john,’ she said.
After a few minutes Jim made his way there.
She was standing at the back, past the urinals, outside the only clean cubicle.
Jim walked in and put a broom handle against the door.
‘Well, hallelujah baby.’
‘Come on,’ she said, walking into the cubicle, pulling down her jeans.
‘You’re as sweet as cherry pie, ain’t you?’
She thought she heard someone trying the door as he entered her. She
looked over Jim’s shoulder at a fly crawling across the graffiti. She felt the
cold wall against her buttocks as he stopped.
He winked and ran his finger across her cheek. ‘Told you I ain’t the maniac trucker.’ Then he looked down at her right forearm and shook his head. There was a
jagged scar running through the tattooed word “Mom”.
After he left, she heard a pick up drive off as she checked herself in
the mirror. She was thinking about food when the door swung open and the waitress
walked in.
‘I knew it,’ she said. ‘I saw him leave. I’m calling the po-lice.’
‘Why the fuck you such a bitch?’
‘You just made a big mistake, you ho.’
‘You don’t get to call me no hooker, you’re just a fucking waitress.’
She was trying to leave when Patty grabbed her hair. She spun round and
struck Patty hard across the face.
‘I wish that killer would pick you’, the waitress said.
Patty smiled. ‘Oh yeah?’
She had one fist clenched in the waitress’s uniform as she pulled her
switchblade from her pocket and opened up her throat. The blade was still
moving in the air as the waitress spurted blood on the wall, staggering round
with her eyes popping. And Patty watched her fall, one hand on the floor,
reaching for something she never found.
She stepped over the body and out of the diner and hailed a passing
truck.
Jim went back the next day and heard the waitress had been killed by the
maniac trucker.
Bio:
Richard
Godwin is the author of crime novels Mr. Glamour and Apostle Rising and is a
widely published crime and horror writer.
Mr.
Glamour is his second novel and was published in paperback in April 2012. It is
available online at Amazon http://www.amazon.com/Mr-Glamour-Richard-Godwin/dp/0956711332
and at all good retailers. Mr.Glamour is Hannibal Lecter in Gucci. The novel is
about a glamorous world obsessed with designer labels with a predator in its
midst and has received great reviews. Pulp Metal Fiction recently
published Piquant, Tales Of The Mustard Man,
his culinary genius. His Chin Wags At The Slaughterhouse are interviews
he has conducted with writers and can be found at his blog . You can also find a full list of his works
on his website.
'I've an obsession with Ameicana/I've the first velevets album, with the peel off banana'. Great.
ReplyDeleteGreat album, great cover.
ReplyDeleteTight, entertaining, kick-ass noir. Loved it!
ReplyDeleteRegards,
Col
Thanks Col. Like a Dennis Hopper.
ReplyDeleteBrutal work.
ReplyDeleteThanks Carrie.
ReplyDeletePatented Godwin twist and a strike for the fair treatment of women everywhere. There's no glass ceiling in the murder game. Equal opportunity and spurting arteries everywhere. Cool.
ReplyDeleteTame for you, Richard, but a great piece never the less. Terrific atmosphere build. I loved this vignette. Thanks for the read.
ReplyDeleteTaut tense writing with wonderful descriptions and pace throughout. The twist at the end elevated it even higher.
ReplyDeleteBill there's no telling in a diner like that. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteThanks Keith. Glad you liked the atmosphere.
ReplyDeleteThanks Graham. I'm glad you liked it.
ReplyDeleteindustrial chiller rocks!
ReplyDeleteReally enjoyed the home-spun horror and the verite of the diner scene. The interplay between hooker and waitress was great too.
ReplyDeleteThanks James.
ReplyDeleteChris thank you I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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