tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3733545996388457449.post740486503681188888..comments2024-03-05T16:43:58.548+00:00Comments on Thrillers, Killers 'n' Chillers: CAUGHT IN THE HEADLIGHTS By Col BuryAuthorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12033131935968488175noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3733545996388457449.post-30188301792657074562011-08-04T14:12:24.603+01:002011-08-04T14:12:24.603+01:00Cheers, Starky.
As you can see from the comments,...Cheers, Starky. <br />As you can see from the comments, this was one of my earlier stories which helped me learn to really zone in on my writing.<br />Best,<br />ColCol Buryhttp://colburysnewcrimefiction.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3733545996388457449.post-79452244651415574932011-08-04T02:08:30.452+01:002011-08-04T02:08:30.452+01:00Brilliant, from start to finish.
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StarkyBrilliant, from start to finish.<br /><br />Cheers<br /><br />StarkyAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3733545996388457449.post-66702675543406736322009-02-27T18:22:00.000+00:002009-02-27T18:22:00.000+00:00Having slept on this, Bill...I have to agree!I did...Having slept on this, Bill...I have to agree!<BR/>I did sort of summarise in the end when the story had sort of reached its natural conclusion. Lesson learned!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17913040012695421077noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3733545996388457449.post-76629697608718213562009-02-26T18:03:00.000+00:002009-02-26T18:03:00.000+00:00Interesting angle, Bill. I'm all for learning from...Interesting angle, Bill. I'm all for learning from my mistakes so thanks for your honesty. <BR/>I'll be honest in return. I did consider having Brenda's daughters being picked up for real, but I opted for the partial twist instead. The reason being: in Writing Mag', where it was submitted, I believe (rightly or wrongly) the judges are older and, without stereotyping all older people, perhaps less liberal in their views, going off the fluffy stuff that's won in that Mag' before.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17913040012695421077noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3733545996388457449.post-36381855744858696652009-02-26T14:45:00.000+00:002009-02-26T14:45:00.000+00:00Hello, Col.As I said, your writing is gritty, auth...Hello, Col.<BR/>As I said, your writing is gritty, authentic,and very real. I was carried along with the stark realness of it and my mouth was dry. It was gripping drama - up to this line ...‘Jesus, no!’ It was her other daughter, Hannah, getting into another car!...'<BR/>I hope you dont mind if I say this but it becomes 'melodramatic' after this and doesn't do your talent justice.<BR/>'Caught in the headlights (like a rabbit )' implies a moment of realisation.(for Brenda) Her daughter getting into a car should have been real, not a contrived set up. A wake up call. End. <BR/>BillUnknownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14124189702947794859noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3733545996388457449.post-68288033808009477662009-02-20T22:03:00.000+00:002009-02-20T22:03:00.000+00:00Thanks very much, guys. I wish you two were judgin...Thanks very much, guys. I wish you two were judging the competition it didn't win. They obviously didn't receive my manuscript!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17913040012695421077noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3733545996388457449.post-87981193450158732172009-02-20T19:29:00.000+00:002009-02-20T19:29:00.000+00:00I liked that a lot ColI liked that a lot ColChris Pictonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18418973358352783667noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3733545996388457449.post-10898694681894904062009-02-11T20:19:00.000+00:002009-02-11T20:19:00.000+00:00Good redemptive tale, Col. I enjoyed it very much....Good redemptive tale, Col. I enjoyed it very much.Authorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12033131935968488175noreply@blogger.com